Talk:TDF/Next Decade Manifesto

I've make a part of translation to Spanish of the page, but when I save the work and go to the page, seems my translation is in the English version (or "the official version") of the document.

It's right?

How can I solve that?

Sorry for the mistake.

Claudio

Suggestions for improving clarity

Hi, here are a few suggestions:

the ownership of office productivity tools by monopoly suppliers which 
imposes a de-facto tax on global electronic free speech and penalises 
the economically disadvantaged

Could be:

the ownership of office productivity tools by monopolistic suppliers,
which permits the taxing of global digital speech freedom
and disadvantages the less fortunate users

(and I would not mention that last bit : absolutely anything that involves a financial transaction "penalises the economically disadvantaged"...)

the creeping domination of computer desktops by a single language 
forcing people to learn a foreign language before they can express 
themselves electronically

Could be

the creeping domination of a single language on desktop software,
which makes learning a foreign language a prerequisite
for effective expression through digital means

the ownership of file formats by proprietary software companies - documents belong to their creators, not software vendors

Could be

the ownership of file formats by proprietary software organizations,
which puts control over the documents in the hands of software vendors instead of creators

a closed software development process where errors can lie hidden and poor quality is accepted

Could be

A closed software development process where errors can lie hidden and quality may be privately overlooked

Hope this helps, OlivierC 2010-10-16T12:29:23 (CEST)

Further suggestions for improving clarity

Some further proposals that would improved clarity:

to eliminate the digital divide in society by giving everyone access to 
office productivity tools free of charge to enable them to participate 
as full citizens in the 21st century

Could be

to working towards eliminating the digital divide in society
by offering unrestricted access to office productivity tools, free of charge,
enabling users to participate as full citizens of the 21st century

[note the grammatical structure : "we commit to working" and not "we commit to work"]

to support the preservation of mother tongues by encouraging all peoples
 to translate, document, support, and promote our office productivity 
tools in their mother tongue

Could be

to supporting linguistic diversity
by encouraging the translation, documentation, support and promotion of our tools
in all languages

to allow users of office productivity software to retain the 
intellectual property in the documents they create by use of open 
document formats and open standards

Could be

to giving office productivity software users the full means
to retain the intellectual property in the documents that they create
by the extensive use of open document formats and standards

[here I am very wary of the use of the term "intellectual property", something that closed formats does not damage or remove.]

to an open and transparent peer-reviewed software development process where technical excellence is valued

Could be

to an open and transparent, peer-reviewed software development process
that promotes technical excellence

Hope this helps, please discuss! OlivierC 2010-10-16T12:44:38 (CEST)